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Nov 16, '05 4:49 AM
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I will stare at the moon and weep,
Because I will never have the courage to tell him..
I will just watch from afar as he stares at the girl of his dreams.
I will laugh with him as he prepares for his first date,
And cry with him when his heart gets broken.
I will nurture him and heal his pain. Then see him off again
And when he needs someone to hold on during his dark moments i will be there
I will stare at the sun thankful for the new day
but my heart will break when he finds someone to love.. and he will never know

thanks to Bad Beef for helping me with the poem. This poem was inspired by the hypothetical questions Bad beef and me was discussing :)

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maigaray wrote on Nov 16, '05, edited on Nov 16, '05

Let's discuss this offline...

slvrdlphn wrote on Nov 16, '05, edited on Nov 16, '05

Sounds like a classic situation.

Girl meets boy ... boy meets other girl ...
Other girl not showing interest in boy ...
Girl heartbroken for boy yet hoping boy will notice girl ...
Other girl still oblivious. Boy still pining.
Girl continues to pine.

But consider that maybe BOY just needs to know how GIRL feels somehow. Don't take my word for it, though. It's just a suggestion. Oftentimes, things don't work out the way they should because of lack of information. For all you know, you may be in his dreams, too, but because you've been "the friend" for so long, he is blinded to possibilities. For all you know, he may have been attracted to you at the beginning but decided in favor of friendship after seeing that you only saw him that way.

Things will work themselves out. Maybe the timing just isn't right yet. Who knows how the wheels of fate turn?

kestral wrote on Nov 16, '05

Offline? :p wehehe

evildex wrote on Nov 16, '05

GEEKBOY ALERT: Silmarillion references

Why do we always wind up staring at the moon and weeping? I've always found that recurring image curious. I've used it myself. Maybe because Tilion is the silent sympathetic witness to all our trials, sins and pathetic lovelives: the Sun is too busy searing us with her glory. Maybe, we tell ourselves, the Moon sympathizes because of his own situation: always chasing after Anor, but never quite catching up.

Why are men doomed to chase chicks and why are chicks doomed to pine for men-- even if said men are really smelly, unreliable, inconstant horndogs?

I sympathize, Benny dearest: I've been in all three places in my 30+ years of existence. And it isn't easy. Penny's right: maybe the timing stinks, or maybe the poor sap hasn't noticed you, or maybe ... (insert cliche here). But it does get better. Ask Gi.

I like your poem because it clearly shows your sentiment. It's short, sweet, and carries you gently-sweetly-sadly to your main thesis. I like the duality, the contrasting images in these lines:

I will just watch ...as he stares ...
I will laugh with him as he prepares for his first date,
And cry with him when his heart gets broken....
And when he needs someone to hold on during his dark moments ...
I will stare at the sun thankful for the new day

You've got a feel for poetry. And Bad Beef is turning into quite the literary assistant. Should I be scared? : )

keltskross wrote on Nov 17, '05

evildex said

You've got a feel for poetry. And Bad Beef is turning into quite the literary assistant. Should I be scared? : )

weheheheh --- shouldn't we all?

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keltskross wrote on Nov 17, '05, edited on Nov 17, '05

kestral said

I will nurture him and heal his pain. Then see him off again
And when he needs someone to hold on during his dark moments i will be there
I will stare at the sun thankful for the new day
but my heart will break when he finds someone to love.. and he will never know

Been there, done that. But I still feel, it pales in comparison to the pain of hoping and failing. Better to know where you stand and accept it than to question it forever more.

It's a beautiful poem. I'm not much of a judge in poetry. But I think it's pretty.

kestral wrote on Nov 17, '05, edited on Nov 17, '05

keltskross said

weheheheh --- shouldn't we all?

Are you saying we need to be afraid of bad beef??? hehe (peace Gelo!)

jo1solitaire wrote on Nov 17, '05

i like it... it's sad but well written ... it's very easy to slip into exaggerated woe when writing about heartbreak... glad to see that wasnt a problem here... and though you say this rose from hypothesis, i believe that when inspiration strikes from out of the blue, it must be coming from someplace real.

badbeef wrote on Dec 23, '05

kestral said

Are you saying we need to be afraid of bad beef??? hehe (peace Gelo!)

long time for me to reply to this one .. ;)

who's afraid of the big badbeef? :P

we still havent sat down and have that beer together.. maybe next week :)

kestral wrote on Dec 23, '05

yeah beer for you!!! :D

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